Neverside

The Tiger

First poem I've written that I feel comfortable putting here:

Quote:

Do your lips part or purse,
in the quiet cacophony of night?
Sleep-sounds swirl over silent linoleum floors

Your shoulders, full breadth
You've enveloped the world
But no one will ever see

And in the light, you reduce yourself
to a talking head with an arid mind

Also on dA if you'd rather comment there: http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/46347714/

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other then a few missing punctuation marks, it's not bad, Sykil.

shall we see more of your works.

Originally posted by Lexykon:

other then a few missing punctuation marks, it's not bad, Sykil.

That's something that I'm usually pedantic about (as others will attest), but it doesn't seem vital to me in poetry.

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Last edited by Sykil, January 13th, 2007 04:36 AM (Edited 1 times)